Dear Ally, a Story. Chapter 1

Dear Ally, a Story

My daughter is a fairly prolific writer for an 8 year old. Here’s the first chapter of a book she wrote last fall, called Dear Ally. ( Ally is supposed to be read as “allie.”) It’s about a girl named Emily who moves to Arizona and writes to her friend from her old town, Ally, about all her new adventures.

I just added spaces to make it more readable.

She’d be super pleased if you left a comment for her:)
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DEAR ALLY,
I just hope you’ll listen to all my adventures. All of them are going to be awesome!! I think… anyway, I’m moving to Arizona and I think it’s really hot there, is it? I know what you’re thinking, Emily, I’ve been there before and you’re saying HOT?! YOU’RE CRAZY!!! IT’S BURNING HOT THERE!!Yeah, well, its winter there and it’s just hot. BA~BOOM!!!

FYI, I’m at Arizona right now. OMG!! We just got a puppy. I just love puppies, don’t you?! Uh… 100 divided by 10. Lol. I just did 5th grade math in front of a 3rd grader! Anyway, we named the dog Gatsby, and he seems always happy! He’s yellow, sometimes crazy, and licks me all the time! My little brother, Ted, (age of 7 and in 2nd grade,) went crazy in our hotel room! Mom and Dad sleep in a room next to us, but attached.

Ted just started screaming, ‘’ NUH UH!! THAT NOT RIGHT EMILY!! SPONGE BOB IS FALLING FOR SQUIDWARD’S TRICK!! OH NO!!’’

I said, “Calm down! Sponge Bob is ok!’’ then he started to cry.

Mom busted in! She said, “WHAT’S GOING ON?! IS THERE A PROBLEM?!”

I said, ‘’ Mom, Ted’s going crazy because of Sponge bob falling for squid ward’s trick.”

Mom said, ‘’oh, Ted, sponge bob will be ok. See? Squid ward is crying now sponge bob~ ‘’

‘’Whaaaaa!!!’’ Ted rudely interrupted.

Then I got a call. Ring ring ring! It was my friend, Mia. ‘’ Hi, Emily! I haven’t while. Seen you in a What’s up? What’s going on in Arizona? I’m doing fine in San Diego. Wait, I can hear your brother throwing a fit. What’s his problem?’’

I said, ‘’ I’m fine, Mia. Anyway, my brother is throwing a fit because sponge bob is falling for squid ward’s trick.’’

She said, ‘’ what, girl?!’’

I said, ‘’ It’s a REALLY LONG story. (giggles)’’.

She said, ‘’ OOHH. Sponge bob, right? My little sister, Sarah, she likes it too. What, mom? Oh come on!!” Mia sighed. “Sorry Emily, I have to do the dishes. FYI, good luck!! Bye!’’

I said, ‘’ Bye, Mia!’’ then my dog JUMPED TO MY PHONE AND ATE IT!!!

Then I fainted. No, really, FAINTED!!

Then I saw my dog lick my face about at 12:00 pm. At the time I fainted, it was about 7:00 pm. I fainted for 5 hours!!! Can you believe it?! 5 HOURS!!! Then I called Mia on my emergencery~ cell~phone~ thingy.

‘’ Hi~ WHOOPS! I called my crush, Brandon.

‘’I~I~’’ he said, ‘’ Who is this?! It’s 12:00am!’’

I said, ‘’ Oh, I’m sorry! I was trying to call Mia, you know, from school. Oh yeah, I’m Emily, your BFI (best friend infinity.)’’

He said, ‘’ Oh, umm, hi, then. Anyway, be er umm careful because I use to live there, and, are you going to CatKing middle school because there’s a major bully there, Mackenzie Orville.’’

I said, ‘’ Well, er… I’m going to CatKing middle school, so I’ll be real careful.’’

He said, ‘’Ok! Uh, that’s good. Bye!’’

I said, ‘’ Bye, Brandon!’’ and went to bed.

Then I got woken up at about 4:44 am by Ted. He said, ‘’ Emily, Emily, wake up! Sponge bob came in our hotel room and showed me how to do 100X122!!!’’

I shouted, ‘’ Yeah, IN YOUR HEAD, NOW GET IN BED!!’’

He said, ‘’Ok, that rhymes! (giggles)’’ then he and I went back to bed. 2 hours later, at 6:05, I was woken up (again) by mom this time.

She said, ‘’ time to go to school!’’ I got ready for school and went to school. (I walked.) Then I meet someone new. A girl name Abbey Key. She has brown, shiny, hair.(which I’m pretty sure she’s
the great, great, great, great, great granddaughter of Elvis.) Anyway, we’re BFFI now!

There was a “student store” at our school. Everything costs about $1.00 or 50 cents. I bought a really cute kola eraser for 50 cents. All I had in my pockets were a dollar coin and 50 cents. Now I have just a dollar coin. When I went to class, I saw I am going to sit next to a girl name Mackenzie.

5 thoughts on “Dear Ally, a Story. Chapter 1

  1. I think this author has a great sense of style and really knows how to build tension. I enjoyed the way the virls talked to ezch other. I’m curious about the bully. I want to know if Sponge Bob really talked to her brother-you never know. This writer has talent!

  2. Well done! I was interested the entire chapter and am looking forward to the rest of the story. The apple hasn’t fallen far from the tree with this young writer. Keep up the great work!

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